Thread:TJlive800/@comment-4952704-20150224023342/@comment-4952704-20150321102952

We should really focus on Season 1. Yeah, i had no opening sentence there. But after further analysis, Season 1 is kinda not good. I mean there are good ideas, but i've said something a while back, somewhere in December/January: Fan fiction needs more personal conflict. It needs more personal issues, not just all action or all plot, which is what Season 1 kinda is. All just plot and really cool ideas.

That may have put you off, that it doesn't have the real bones. It has the meat down, but you also need the bones. What i mean by that is, we need actual character development. Setup and payoff. That's what Season 1 needs more of, not just cool plots and cool villains, and shock value with people turning against each other. No. What's to care about our characters if they don't have real character development, if we dont watch them grow?

I'm not saying to put all that shit in Destiny, but you may as well plant the seeds for later episodes. A perfect example of setup and payoff is Breaking Bad, and one out of many of its setups is this little kid at the beginning-middle of Season 2. This seemingly innocent kid shoots Jesse's friend, and the episode revolves around his death. The kid is never seen or heard from again.

At the middle-end of Season 3, the kid comes back later with a huge role, being the son of Jesse's girlfriend, and there's a big plot around this kid. That is setup and payoff. I'm not saying to add a kid in there for later, that was just an example. But here's an example for Sif's character development: Spectacular Spider-Man. That show is fucking great with character development.

Peter Parker acts like a teenager and actually has real problems, like Aunt May struggling to pay the bills, and him not being there for his friends. The 100, the best show i've seen with character development, a character named Marcus starts out as a selfish and power hungry antagonist, and slowly learns of what he's become and turns into an honorable protagonist.

And these are just examples, Alpha needs this type of shit to be considered a good show. We have the personalities down, we have the really cool plots, we're missing the character development. And try not to skim through this post. But like, i've noticed you've skimmed through Season 2, and with good reason. It doesn't have setup and payoff or character development.

You have more creative control for a reason, mostly with Bradly's plot. Now i'm giving you a little more creative control for Sif's plot. Show me your true strength in writing.